my show don't tell

Good morning reader's today I am posting a blog post and can you please give some feedback

One day I was going to the beach in a hot sunny day.It was nice going to the beach everyday and I was making sandcastle and I made another sandcastle and I end up making a big sandcastle and I cover myself with sand in the sandcastle and the water come and washed up my sandcastle.

The present

 Good morning reader's today I am going to show you my writing that I have done over past two weeks and I have write about the present and it was pretty good and can you please can give me some feedback.